I think I need help with his one.?
Neap Tide
On my own,
away,
I`ve grown
Your poison fell from me
dissolved in the low tide
of my loneliness
it took a year for the sea to free me
it pounded on my hearts surf at high tide
dislodged my need for the drug you are
altered the landscape,
here now alone
floating in my own amniotical neap tide
far from low
I am
a fresh clean canvas
reflecting tide pools
awaiting a brush with spring.
"It took an ocean of hot salt tears to get me clean" Is that better for line 7?
It's just finas it is, I see what you've, create a visual poem so it looks like the ebbing of a tide, nicely done. I wouldn't change anything.
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